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Post by larsenmcallirhoe on Apr 20, 2012 18:57:49 GMT -5
That One Dance
One night I saw you angel of hope on the dance floor all by yourself.
You gave me a chance which is more then all I could of ever perceived from you.
You turned my heart upside down and inside out as sparks flew in the hall.
Twirling around my heart skips a beat or two as I hear your wings fluttering all around me.
If I wear pride on my sleeve the best you can do is fall in love with romance.
Don't you see this act of love sacrifice I give you from the bottom of my heart.
Sunshine on the water it seems so clear next time around I will give a wedding ring.
Our magic captured in a photograph taken.
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Post by Martin on Apr 22, 2012 4:42:31 GMT -5
Very nice Larsen. I really like this one.
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Post by timbo889015 on May 7, 2012 16:10:46 GMT -5
I really like how this one developed from how it was when you first posted it on the old forums, I think the message is portrayed a lot clearer now.
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Post by larsenmcallirhoe on May 8, 2012 20:07:44 GMT -5
thanks timbo. one of my poetry friends on another poetry forum suggested i trim down the original poem. after i workd at it for about an hour this was the result. and i am pleased with it. this is a real story btw. i changed the title. i like both poems. the material could spawn a few more writes because i truly was aspired.
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